Agripina Dommer
Friday, July 15, 2011
What do you think of this writing?
It was good, very descriptive. Watch it on the punctuation though. Also, the end seemed a little weak & it took me a while to figure out why davin was scared; it could be improved to a different reason or reword the paragraph .
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